I agree with the others to def. pinch it more, also I think it may be turned wrong....? It looks to me like you turned the bow sideways (not backwards)and then pinched (does this make sense?) lol!
It looks nice and "loopy" though!! I also think maybe you are using too much ribbon..... You will get there! I still have some days where I have to make a twisted about 900 times before it looks like I want it too